Therefore, if anything needs to be added or removed please do so. Edit any thing the do not follow these comments:Great start. Title good – perhaps the focus is on football so you put that in subtitle? In that way you can start more generally but then go on to focus on football as a case study?

The one thing that I would say you ought to do is try and go a bit deeper into the literature. For a start you might search for some general material on critiques of IP law – start with any of the general IP law texts perhaps then search for some articles. Sport/football is a microcosm of a broader problem where institutions control IP.